Group Workshop Feedback

My introduction included a personal experience and attempted to relate to student athletes. The conclusion tied the idea that student athletes from Virginia Tech can make a positive contribution to the Special Olympics Virginia community. My group was able to identify the topic: persuading Virginia Tech's student athletes to volunteer their time to the organization. They also picked up on my broader theme: that the Special Olympics is able to do so much for other people, but they haven't received as much help, namely, they haven't received enough funding and they could use more volunteers.

I am concerned that my essay may have a too narrow focus, because I found it hard to write 3-1/2 pages. I also felt that I began to stretch some of the ideas, and my essay began to look more superficial than I intended, because I was trying to fill up the space. I am going to try and dig even deeper into the topics that I touched on in my essay.