Rewriting: Chapter 5 - Revising

These questions were answered after the conference with Ms. Scott.

What's your project?

In my research proposal I would like to evaluate the problems facing the Special Olympics as well as propose solutions to solve them.

What works?

The proposal presents a substantial background section, but can be cut shorter given the audience. I think it is the strongest section because it is highly informative and provides context.

What else might be said?

I could talk about how exactly I would go about getting the information and begin to propose solutions to the problems outlined in the research proposal.

What's next?

I think that I can add more to the methods section to show the funding agency that the research was well thought out and planned. I added a conclusion and abstract sections to tie up the research proposal.