Research Proposal Feedback

When I sent my email, containing my paper, I wasn't sure what to expect when I got it back. Most of my English teachers required us to hand in a hard copy for them to mark-up in red or green ink. I wasn't sure how I was going to get feedback on my paper. Well, to my surprise I got a play-by-play response from Grete.

I got a lot of feedback about the MLA format and since this is maybe my second or third time dealing with it. (block quote formatting, quote formatting, works cited section, etc.) I also got some interesting feedback about how to present the problems section and the proposed solutions (results) section. I also think I can go into more detail about the specific materials/resources that I need to complete my project. For example, since I am asking for money from the Kennedy Foundation, I intend to include a budget breakdown of how much money I will need and how I'm going to spend it. For my problems section, I am going to include all the problems, including Blacksburg and the international Special Olympics organization. I also intend to revamp my proposed solutions section, to the present suggestions section, because the research that I am going to conduct is supposed to help me gain more information and help me understand how to attack the problem.

I actually like the comments inside the document because I can revise the document and have the comments right next to it.